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IsildurThu 29-Oct-15 03:37 PM
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#4482, "RE: Look in the eyes - easy and informational"
Edited on Thu 29-Oct-15 03:38 PM

          

I do this too, but a pet peeve of mine are descriptions that have the character "doing" something without qualifying it.

Something like: "So and so winks at you and flashes a friendly smile."

So are they winking and smiling if you look at them right after putting them to sleep? Probably not.

You can fix this by qualifying the sentence like, "If they notice you glancing at them, they return your gaze with a wink and a friendly smile."

Even that's a little questionable because there are probably some folks who are going to look at your character that you're not "friendly" with. So your character would not, in fact, return their gaze with a wink and a friendly smile.

Something like this would work: "Should he notice your gaze, {Character} returns it with an enigmatic smile."

Maybe you're smiling because you're friendly. Maybe you're smiling because you're planning to murder the person who's looking at you. Nobody knows! It's enigmatic!

  

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TopicJormyr's Description Help [View all] , Jormyr, Mon 26-Oct-15 07:26 PM
Reply Please sticky, Kstatida, 03-Oct-16 03:31 AM, #12
Reply Look in the eyes - easy and informational, Kstatida, 29-Oct-15 10:40 AM, #3
Reply RE: Look in the eyes - easy and informational, Isildur, 29-Oct-15 03:38 PM #4
     Reply Oh there's always a measure of abstraction, Kstatida, 30-Oct-15 06:38 AM, #5
          Reply RE: Oh there's always a measure of abstraction, Isildur, 30-Oct-15 10:06 AM, #6
          Reply Well both of these are in help description iirc, Kstatida, 30-Oct-15 11:37 AM, #7
               Reply RE: Well both of these are in help description iirc, Jormyr, 31-Oct-15 03:30 AM, #8
                    Reply I'd like an option to have different descriptions, incognito, 31-Oct-15 03:51 AM, #9
                         Reply Buahahaha, Doof, 01-Nov-15 12:41 PM, #10
          Reply I generally use "Your gaze falls upon", Theerkla, 02-Nov-15 06:23 AM, #11
Reply Could you add, lurker, 27-Oct-15 06:58 PM, #2
Reply What's your favorite description you've ever read?, Homard, 26-Oct-15 07:33 PM, #1
     Reply Jesus Mary and Joseph, crsweeney, 03-Oct-16 02:52 PM, #13
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