KaasiThis is a fine standard role to justify your cabalchoice. Consider adding more chapters to add someadditional depth as the character ages. (I see youadded one later on, after the role contest and afterI’d read this role.)Zakar80 characters per line, yo!This is a good role. I like the format in that youstart out with a good background story, whereobviously you’ve thought out the character. Then youalso add chapters for important life events.SokdeDecent, bare minimum background. I like that you’veadded “journal type” updates and they’re a fun read,but they’re kind of all over the place and I’m notsure what to take from them. Jumps back and forth alot from 1st person to 3rd. I’ve seen great rolesusing either, but if you want to use both in the sameentry consider making it more obvious when and whyyou’re transitioning. Calahir - Deleted before contest over!Jrhurg Mrhurg – Didn’t want any commentsHrudgir Hirsget – Deleted!Eled – Con Died?IiaGood Introduction, but left me wanting more - especiallygiven how old and active this character is. Wouldhave really liked to have seen sphere choice and aparticular thing referenced in the role spelled outmore!Frajalar*I think the reason I selected this for recognition was the prologue entry. It was just a well written, good length, story that I could really see as I was reading it.Naloril*Great description of the char! Can really imagine thedescribed character. Excellent story describing yourcabal choice.VerakhThis role is, um, something! I’m not sure I have verymuch that would be appropriate to comment here. Iwould encourage you to kind of have a plan more foryour next role and develop your character out insteadof just rehashing common cabal theories/beliefs. Iknow there were “non-essay” parts of your role, butthose left me quite perplexed.Trebilco*LONG! I appreciate your enthusiasm for story telling,but there is some balance to be had between detailsand finding a reasonable length that people can readand absorb. I think the first story (how you got toyour guild) could have been told in a shorter fashionwithout losing much. SekhurothGood Basic Role. Kind of wordy for not much meat, butgood imagery/ideas. It’s also possible I just don’t get it.TaelinaI’m guessing English isn’t your first language, but I still thought the story idea was a neat one. I wish your character had stuck to it a little more in her life.GhralnGood basic background role. Good set-up for yourreligion and character detail painting.AhivilnI think your using stream of consciousness could be agood tool for giving the reader an insight into thecharacter’s head. However, I think this could bestrongly, strongly improved by doing more set-up explainingwhat’s going on. Less quantity, more quality!ZelThat’s a lot of role. Easy, enjoyable read. I think you mightneed to also work on the balance between details and areasonable length for a reader to digest. I,personally, would vote for less ‘day to day’ lifestuff and more substance. However, if you enjoywriting them, go for it!AldranGood googely moogley, man! Really freaking long...and a dense read.OfizalGood Culty role. I really like the way “evil” is portrayed in the background story.Veanik – Deleted?Nuloh*I selected this one out just because it was a solid role. It was a little different, it painted a good character foundation, etc.Anildor I like this role, but the entries I liked the most were already handled in last month’s role contest. I do like how you also used the role command to communicate and define “things” for your character.VasstenI don’t really get what you were getting at with this role. Maybe it makes a lot of sense in your religion?EulindaNothing wrong with this role, but it’s very, very minimal.RusylaelI like how this role incorporates character path/skill choices, in an in character way. I always am a sucker for that (why you picked your spec, why you picked your terrain, your repertoire, etc, etc.)HunsoboWhile, I wasn’t especially moved by this role on a creativity/contest winner level, I have to give a lot of credit to the fact I can read it and get a really good idea as to who this character is. I might not have watched you a lot as you ranked, but reading this role I can catch myself up on your past. I’m not sure I’m explaining that well, but it’s one of my points in my ‘general tips’ post on this thread.AlgrahkThat was a little far out there for me, but hey…if you’re enjoying to role more power to you.Toramok I don’t feel I ever quite understood the story this role was trying to tell..ChijiMan, I hate to be down on something where someone is being creative – but that style is damn hard to read!TorinOK basic role.Brinkmun*I thought this was a good, different role for your cabal choice. Easy read and a good story. I, personally, would prefer to see these backgrounds laid at an earlier rank.BurkuzOK basic role.ZherdovHi, I’m Cyradia the Demon Goddess. That is all.Tallanalas*This wasn’t a very well written role (maybe English isn’t your first language?) but the concept was kind pretty fresh.Vessit*I really liked this role. I would have loved to see extra ‘as the character grows’ entries, but I really enjoyed the background story that’s here.NaaraiOK basic role.JhoruimGood basic roleFieneI really liked this role. It’s just a very fun story that I completely enjoyed.KedyliaGood basic roleDyneliI thought this was a cool role, and I especially like the stream of updates. Makes it very useful.Ilden*I liked this role because it was well written, yet fairly simple, but still put a cool spin on an evil character/religion combo.WaseraxSee the comments on Hunsobo and apply them here.GaerhunGood standard role.KaindhinGood standard role. I thought this role had a lot of potential if you’d kinda followed through with the purpose of the things in the story and followed-up with how the character grew.MaethronGood basic role.VictoriaGood basic role. Nice little twist.
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