I had to write far too many comments for this contest, too many good entries--but here is what I have, I hope you enjoy!


Adhelard This is pretty good, I like history, and your story of Voralia & family + tribunal is good stuff.

Aelisoc This is a pretty good role, it has a lot of good information in it. Really the only strike against it is that it is a little hard to follow at points, but still a damn fine effort

Agamenikis Not a bad role, well written and the start of a good storyline

Ardonis Pretty good role, nice intro, though the shift between the two entries could probably be better explained (how the two aspects of his life affects him). But still, a very useful role

Azkril Yeah, this is a good story. You write in a vivid fashion that really conveys a lot, really good work.

Bolen This is a fairly interesting role, and does a good job of explaining the background of Bolen, though some updates would probably push it towards outstanding

Cabdru Nice continuation on your earlier work, particularly the latest entry

Caroolth not bad, a good interesting start and then kept relevant through updates

Cyriac More entries then levels, and each one detailing your life. It really was a fun read, I felt just like I was in the academy with you, I think it’s a most promising start.

Eusjouk This is a long, extremely detailed entry, you clearly put a lot of good thought into this.

Fereacu An outstanding story, from the description of your abilities to the incorporation of a theme that will carry you through the life of the character.

Hyzin This role is outstanding. It has great emotional intensity and story, and yeah, I don't know that I can praise it enough. The first handful of entries in particular are very moving.

Jeril The opening narrative in the first two entries was quite nice, it incorporated all sorts of character aspects, well done.

Kaciam A pretty good role, nice description of religion & meetings.

Kharghurln Ok, this is good funny fare. I particularly like your first couple and the last entry, its some good storytelling

Kharthak This is a good start with a lot of promise, should really expand on the backstory

Krithnar Good backstory and you get a real flavor of the characters thought process

Krundig Pretty good role, some of the transitions weren't the most clear, has very much a small flashback vibe, which can be played verll well. Good work

Kuchnaya An interesting role, but I have no idea whatever is going on! You simply must add to it so we can figure it out

Landren Another really good role. You people are making it hard on us poor judges.

Lelil I really enjoyed your narrative style, you start off really well, and someone should beat you with the update stick!

Lemli This isn't a bad role, brief, but is a worthy attempt. Could really be fleshed out more, but is a good start

Morgrun A solid role, gives a lot of good detail and explains the steps along your path from childhood to paladintime

Raec I think we can all see the importance of cleanliness. This is a damn funny little role amidst a lot of seriousness. Go crazy

Rhanna A pretty good story, nice explanation of the effects one might take in doing something they believe is right and then the costs possible.

Saroiya This is a long detailed role that carries you through the life of the character. Good job

Sebastiano This is a good role that uses a lot of good narrative tools to convey a story

Terekin This is pretty good, has backstory with humor, could have done a lot more with it in this style I think though.

Thelmon A nice little role, you give a background, explain the character and go from there. Nothing super unique but really defines what one could want/hope for

Torrth It's an interesting story, but the type of role that really calls out for more updates--so get to it.

Tyrelyn I really like this role, you get a real flavor for the character and his evil machinations

Valryn An interesting start, update some more!

Vandrylon A nice continuation of your role. I like the funny and how you carry through with all your "options"

Vinstabrar You could be an evil bastard. Really the twist on torture was down right interesting.