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Forum Name New Player Q&A
Topic subjectPreferred description styles?
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4780, Preferred description styles?
Posted by Jaegendar on Wed 31-Dec-69 07:00 PM
I always arrange my descriptions in paragraphs like this:

blahblahblahblahblahblahblah. Blahblahblah
Blahblahblahblahblahblahblahblahblahblahblah
blahblah.

Blahblahblahblahblahblahblahblaheyesblahblah
noseisbigblahblahblahblahblahblahbutmyblah
blahblahblahisbiggerthanyoursblahblahblah.

I usually do about three paragraphs for a total length of around 8-10 lines.

But I've seen on the premium BF that most descs that are rewarded and praised are just a big clump like this:

blahblahblahblahblahblahblah. Blahblahblah
Blahblahblahblahblahblahblahblahblahblahblah
blahblah.Blahblahblahblahblahblahblahblaheyes
blahblah noseisbigblahblahblahblahblahblahbut
blahblahblahisbiggerthanyoursblahblahblah.

With just about the same amount of desc lines.

What is the preferred "format" for imms on descriptions?

-J
4781, It isn't about format
Posted by Kstatida on Wed 31-Dec-69 07:00 PM
It's about content.
4784, This.
Posted by Ishuli on Wed 31-Dec-69 07:00 PM
It could even be clumsy grammatically, ESL, or otherwise - if it gives me a cool description that describes something in cool fashion, I tend to give it some xp.

I will say that longer descriptions tend to get xp, but it isn't explicitly for their length - but rather that longer ones TEND to tell me more.



But yeah, short of it is:
1) Does it tell me about your character in an interesting fashion?
2) Is the description itself unique/cool in a believable fitting/fantasy way?
4790, Additionally.
Posted by Umiron on Wed 31-Dec-69 07:00 PM
Not everyone is the same, but I've always been a sticker for descriptions that make sense and are logically consistent.

If your description describes you in wizard garb while you're wearing nothing but plate armor, eh. If your description has you standing, smiling and calmly acknowledging me while you're dying in battle, eh. And so on.

A lot of that is addressed by the helpfile(s) and Academy texts.

I've also never been a huge fan of the "You also notice that..." end of description gimmick. I think it tends to detract from the narrative of a quality description. I don't hold that one against people, though.
4792, RE: Additionally.
Posted by Jormyr on Wed 31-Dec-69 07:00 PM
>Not everyone is the same, but I've always been a sticker for
>descriptions that make sense and are logically consistent.

Heh, says the guy who's forum signature is how Umiron perished, never to return again :P
>
>I've also never been a huge fan of the "You also notice
>that..." end of description gimmick. I think it tends to
>detract from the narrative of a quality description. I don't
>hold that one against people, though.

Agreed, that one always irritated me as a cheap addition.
4793, RE: Additionally.
Posted by Kstatida on Wed 31-Dec-69 07:00 PM
>Agreed, that one always irritated me as a cheap addition.

I love it how it includes the next line into the description. Which I think is nice. I make my best to make it match the line lengh though, so that it doesn't look out of place.
4795, RE: Additionally.
Posted by Thaedan on Wed 31-Dec-69 07:00 PM
>If your description describes you in wizard garb while you're
>wearing nothing but plate armor, eh.

One way around this:

It is hard to tell given the mismatched pieces of armor he's wearing, but it looks as if this fellow is sporting midnight blue wizard robes. Here and there you can see their glowing runes where his garment peeks out from an otherwise unprotected gap in the armor.

This manages to mention the wizard robes while still acknowledging that the character is wearing a hodge-podge of other armor.

>If your description has you standing, smiling and calmly
>acknowledging me while you're dying in battle, eh.

Solution for this:

Should the young man notice your inspection of him, he acknowledges you with a rakish smile.

This lets you put some "character" into the description without describing yourself as doing something that doesn't make sense. (Like flashing a rakish smile while you're magically slept.)