>Nep did a favor for me and listed some of the things which my
>character said, which he didn't feel were RP. My question is
>this: How could I of said these things better?
>
>Suggestions are welcome.

I think a lot of it boils down to the idea that if you're going to use slang it needs to be archaic slang. The thing about slang is that it's very much tied to the time period it's used in, because it comes and goes so quickly. So when you say "son of a bitch" that doesn't sound right because "son of a bitch" has a modern sound to it. Whoreson on the other hand sounds more archaic. Same thing with something like "nailed" Nailed is a very new way to describe getting someone, and it therefore sounds very out of place in a supposedly medieval world.

The second big thing is using direct game-mechanic words like gaunt, aura wand, etc. I won't go too much into this one since there's already that big sub-thread on verbification re: gaunting, but I think one thing that's been missed there is that it's a lot like technical jargon. You wouldn't expect a non-conjurer to know what you're talking about if you say "gaunt" the same way I wouldn't expect a non-programmer to understand what exactly I mean by "hash" Sure, among other programmers I'll talk in programmer-y jargon, but even among other technical type people I wouldn't assume that they're familiar with my technical jargon. By the same token, you need to be aware that people who aren't in your guild aren't as familiar as you with your guild's terminology and detailed workings.