< 34> Wed Sep 3 20:54:49 2008
From : Neltouda
To : all
Subject: Role Contest!

Therans!

The time has come for yet another role contest! You have seventy-two hours
from the time of this note to submit your entry for the September role
contest. Please send all submissions to Neltouda not Immortal. Former winners
will be excluded (honorable mentions allowed to enter). Only role chapters
entered prior to this missive will be judged.

Good luck!

Neltouda

What an amazing way to run a Role Contest. I'm not expecting anyone else to do it, just wanted to commend you.

Stats:

ALIGNMENT:
Good 7
Evil 12
Neutral 12

ETHOS:
Chaotic 13
Neutral 14
Orderly 4



SPHERES:

Earth (1) Air (0) Fire (1) Water (1)
Spirit (0) Para-elements (0) Storms (0) Seasons (0)
Death (1) Fertility (0) Magic (1) Reason (0)
Truth (0) Vivimancy (0) Revelation (3) Music (2)
Healing (0) Protection (2) Creation (0) Mercy (0)
Strength (0) Poetry (0) Deception (0) Necromancy (1)
Concealment (1) Courage (0) Victory (0) Destruction (2)
Rage (0) Combat (5) Order (0) Peace (0)
Chaos (2) War (0) Balance (0) Fate (2)
Honor (0) Dedication () Wisdom () Knowledge (1)
Purity (0) Greed (0) Justice (0) Judgment (1)
Love (2) Vanity (0) Beauty (1) Passion (2)
Anger (0) Covetousness (0) Envy (0) Gluttony (0)
Lust (0) Pride (0) Sloth (0) Honesty (0)



CLASS:

Anti-Paladin 2
Assassin 3
Bard 2
Conjurer 0
Druid 2
Healer 3
Invoker 1
Necromancer 1
Paladin 0
Ranger 0
Shaman 1
Shapeshifter 6
Thief 2
Transmuter 0
Warrior 8



RACE:

Arial 6
Cloud Giant 2
Dark-elf
Duergar 1
Dwarf 0
Elf 1
Felar 2
Fire Giant 1
Gnome 1
Half-Drow 2
Half-Elf 1
Human 9
Minotaur 0
Orc 0
Storm Giant 0
Svirfnebli 3
Wood-Elf 2

CABAL:

Battle 2
Empire 1
Fortress 5
Herald 1
Nexus 4
None 13
Outlander 3
Scion 2
Tribunal 0

September Role Contest 32

Ardfil - (75) The author presents a nice read with some great imagery. The
character map is done in a nice concise telling that covers the right points,
yet I am left thinking there should have been an update in here somewhere
(maybe following with the cabal choice, how the character got to his actual
guild or even something concerning new enlightenment into religious views).

Aunkdunell - (70) A very interesting start to a role that really sets the bar
for this character's role play. At the same time, after reading it I feel
that some key points in the character map were over looked or simply too
rushed (such as class choice for example). While I haven't personally
observed this character, from reading the role it definitely sounds like
something fun to play.

Blitterskip - (65) I can't say that I've ever read this classic thief
character map presented in such a fun way before (with real interaction
references to boot). Of course, the map is lacking in some ways, and there's
not a whole lot of depth placed into the character within this single entry.
There might not be anymore depth to this character (which is fine), but it is
a role contest.

Destim - (80) This is an excellent use of updates that really gives a lot of
progression to the character, making me want to know how the story ends. Its
so easy to see the change in the character, something that's very refreshing
to read. At the same time, there are a few things missing from the character
map that I feel could have been explained in some more detail.

Eiyanna - (80) Overflowing with some terrific imagery, this was an excellent
background story to read. Obviously, it's still unfinished, and there's a
lot more basic information to be told about the character. A boosted score
for the start, but not a winner this time due to lack of completion. Great
job just the same!

Erelia - (75) An acceptable use of updates, but perhaps not the best use of
updates. Some of the story line seems too similar between the chapters,
rather than furthering along the character map. At the same time, the
injection of humor made for a nice light read, which I personally enjoy. I
hope this character does eventually find some more direction.

Grelemben - (50) While a correspondence style role may make things a little
easier to convey (compared to writing some elaborate first person story),
I think it's also difficult to inject the full character map into letters.
This role is an example of this difficulty, as I, being the reader, could not
get a good grasp of who Grelemben is from the correspondence. Also, some
chapters simply have no significance on the character at all.

Hafren - (70) This was a hard one for me to rate; on one hand the role does
highlight most of the right points in a character map, on the other the tale
is full with a lot of unneeded information and added filler characters that
didn't personally move the role of Hafren along (the secretary for example).
Your take on (what I assume to be) future cabal choice is unique. It's a
solid role, but simply not a winner. I'll also mention when you enter future
role chapters to keep them between 75 and 80 characters, your lines were
running at just below 100. It can make things difficult to read in some
clients if your lines are over 80.

Halriztan - (65) Also difficult for me to rate; I read story after story and
then come to this role where is more of an outline format. While it is
refreshing to have the character map so easily pointed out, this map is still
lacking in some useful information. Without anything really unique, or some
of the great imagery I have been seeing in some other roles, it simply does
not stand out as a winner. Still, perfectly acceptable, and deserving of the
points already awarded to it.

Halrog - (65) This is very well written as far as use of the English language
goes, and it is presented in a nice concise format. The subject of the
second chapter seems a little rushed, with too many details added in.
Another chapter maybe explaining this further, or how it is helping the
character to mature in some way would be nice. Also, some basic points of
the character map are a litte lacking (how the character got to the cabal
or how this life choice is changing him or enhancing him etc.)

Inaveri - (50) Nice short chapters that make for light reading, but maybe the
length in chapters is constricting the character map. It would be nice to
see a little more direction towards the aspirations of this character, or
even some personal quirks that really make role playing pop. Over all, its
pretty basic and pales when compared to some other entries, still very
acceptable for its purpose but not a winner.

Kikebi - (80) I like the concept of this story, but the beginning chapters
irked me slightly. While there are many things from todays world within CF,
CF is still its own world with its own society norms, terminology etc. I
felt that the first chapters just had a little too much real world feel to
them, and not enough CF world feel. That being said, the progressive updates
are nice and the character map is well put together. Not a number one pick
for this contest, but I'm certain with all of the character quirks this is
a really fun character to play.

Kimemrak - (90) I had read and rated this role originally, and still
remembered it since then. The story of how the character's ethos and
alignment were formed is terrific, and I especially enjoyed the addition of
several gods, CF places and even references to some lyceum books. Excellent
job!

Lelorinel - (50) A perfectly fine, I'm an evil bastard and I kill people for
sport' role, but in terms of a contest the full spectrum of the character map
is lacking. As this is a young character, I'm certain this will fill out in
time.

Lerzion - (85) Well, I've left you with the same score as last time, but the
recent additions are just as consistent with the role if not enhancing it
slightly. The previous comments still apply, great job with conveying the
thoughts and feelings of the character in the most recent chapter.

Lezra - (60) It is difficult to get a make up of a character into very short
role entries, and the first few chapters were simply lacking in information.
However, combined there's plenty of nuggets thrown in there (especially
concerning the character's personality, which is nice) to make this a
viable role, but not a contest winner.

Lierieng - (75) This is a very nice start to a role, but I still see it as a
start rather than a mostly complete package (which is reasonable considering
this is a young character). There's a lack of balance with the background
story of the character's mother (wow, what a birthing story), and the story
of the actual character. Some nice, progressive role updates could help move
this one along.

Mueghlu - (85) What an interesting story that was very well put together.
The only thing that I think could be improved upon would be some further
insight into how the sphere influences the character. Excellent job,
definitely one that stands out amoung the others.

Neleai - (80) The same comments from last time still apply, but the recent
chapter additions definitely give this one a boost. Especially the chapter
about a certain someone really helps to fill out the role play of the
character, and give someone watching the character some insight. Good job.

Nelmae - (75) The mentioning of a loved race is a little choppy here, and I'm
not really sure how that fits in with the character. Something to look at
for further updates maybe. It's obviously what the focus of the character
is, but maybe it would be nice to develop some other things a little more.
Over all, nice role.

Orsvald - (50) While a viable role, there's a lot lacking in the
character map. It simply pales when compared to the other entries.

Orumaen - (75) Having a run down of the previous chapters is always a
welcomed addition, so thank you for that. The role is a nice story and
clearly shows the path to evil, but at the same time it still feels a
little unfinished. Well done over all.

Osorac - (65) Well this is a pretty interesting start, and I really like the
boldness of using an usual sphere given the circumstances. Yet, I'm certain
you know this has a very unfinished feel to it, and I think the character mp
could be improved upon significantly. Great start all the same.

Rynim - Disqualified - role added after the cut off date.

Saerali - (85) While this is not an original sort of story line, the
fantastic use of updates cannot be ignored. The entire package really gives
some great insight into the thoughts and feelings of the character, something
that a lot of people (including myself) have trouble putting into a role.
There is also a lot of movement here, and I really get a sense of how the
character has matured. I will also give a big thanks to you for using some
formatting in the later chapters, much easier to read.

Sammuel - (85) I really really liked the quotes you put at the bottom of the
first two chapters, and it would have been nice to see more of them in the
other chapters. A very nice story with a more unique feel, and well put
together. Some updates with some further insight would be nice, particularly
something about the cabal choice and how the character feels about this.
Overall, great job!

Shumwrahm - (70) A perfectly acceptable role, but simply not a winner this
go around. In the earlier chapters, there isn't a whole lot to explain the
character, and it leaves the character rather one tracked. The most recent
chapter is probably the best as far as information concerning the character
map. Nice job just the same.

Symoinias - Disqualified due to late entry.

Tanith - (80) There's definitely some insight into the character map here,
and the effects on his behavior part is a nice touch. Still, the total
package pales compared to some other entries. Good job just the same.

Tybretr - (75) A fun story that's more on the original side. It's due for
some updates, as a lot has happened to this character, and the character map
could be filled out a bit more.

Vizjun - (80) A nice original story that does give some insight into the
character map (the summary is appreciated). The imagery is also a nice
touch. Good job over all.

Zefta - (65) All of the elements of this character seem a bit rushed. Some
updates would be nice to fill it out a bit. Nice job just the same.

If we want, can we send you a note in-game for suggestions on improving?

Anyone is always welcomed to send me a note or e-mail, I check both at least twice a day. I'll be more than happy to give you a response.

neltouda@carrionfields.com

I could've sworn I sent a note asking to be entered, but I don't see any feedback. Maybe a typo when I sent the note?

I just now saw this, and I'm very sorry if I missed you. The good news, there will be another contest in October (I will not be running it). I went back looking through the notes I still have left, and I only saw one from you about the arena event.

I looked back through my notes and I sent it to Neltoulda. Thanks for the reply!

I rated every role on a 100 point scale: 0 being crap, 50 being average and 100 the best role ever. I didn't give anyone a 100, and I didn't give anyone a 0. Comments and stats to follow.

1st place - Kimemrak

Runners up in no patricular order -

Lerzion, Mueghlu, Saerali, Sammuel

Congratulations to all of you! It was a pleasure.

Can submissions be entered via methods other than IC notes? A la email or the like? I may or may not be able to log in this weekend.

Thanks,
SB