Winners:1st tier: Pleebert, Zaireh2nd tier: Bartis, Kyaltaru, Mejheg and YaelinComments, sorry no stats this time.August 2009 Role Contest58 entriesAelanu - (75) This is a really great role, and I enjoy how it opens up the historyof CF as well as the character. However, I believe this role is still tooimmature to stand out as a top winner. When I say immature, I simply mean thatit doesn't show me character progression/development. I also think the spherechoice could be elaborated on some more such as how it effects the everydayactions of the character. Keep adding to this one, and you may find yourselfwinning another contest.Arramain - (70) This is a very long but well written role. I must admit that youhave some absolutely fantastic lines in here, but I simply was not moved by theexplanation or story. I think a lot of this could have been compressedsignificantly with the same effect, yet at the same time there seemed to be holes.Also, it would be nice if you had updated it to show how the class came to be inplay etc.Arrna - (60) I gave this role a higher than average rated only because I enjoythe consistent use of updates (especially for a long lived character). However,the writing in the role (the actual language) seemed inconsistent. I also wasn'toverly moved by the character map, but honestly after interacting with thischaracter there's a lot of other good things going on with Arrna.Asgeirr - DeletedAzedevar - DeletedAzlotrah - DeletedBalten - (65) This was cute and light and funny in all the right places. However,I wasn't overly moved or drawn to the depth of the character. After reading therole, I'm also not sold on the sphere choice.Bartilo - DeletedBartis - (80) I really like this role because it is clean and simple as well asthe updates really show a lot of movement with the character. I think the spherechoice, while explained, doesn't encompass the character enough in this role.There's also a little funny in there, wish always makes for good reading.Becalbray - (50) I think this role does a fair job of explaining the charactermap. Although after reading it, it seems like the sphere choice is more based onthe character's profession rather than a life leading force. I would think sphereorder would have been better.Beib - (60) I think the updates are good to show some general movement of thecharacter, but overall the life of this one seems on the dull side. It simplydoesn't stand out among the other entries.Dligoniara - (50) I think this is a great start to what reads like it would be avery fun character, but it is just a start. I really like to see plenty ofmovement in the lives of characters, and with one chapter there really isn't thathere.Dupmasione - (75) I really enjoy how each chapter starts out with a referenceto the sphere choice. I wouldn't pick this out as a top winner, simply becauseI think there's a lot of room here to explore more depth of the character. Atthe same time, I also like the movement of the character's life. Well done.Drustrui - (70) There were some good things about this role, such as I think it'sa nice creepy story for an evil character and it gives a lot of potential forrole play situations. There were also some bad things. First, a wall of text isnever good, use paragraphs. Second, the use of pronouns confused me. Half the timeI couldn't tell if you simply forgot the gender of your character or if you weretalking about another character in the story. I can see how the sphere choice comesout here, but I am not certain about the class.Dynruundt - (75) I really like the use of quick chapters that are condensed enough,yet give full insight into the motivations of the character. The injection of OOCremarks ruins it a little for me, but it looks as if you have strayed away fromthis tactic in the later chapters (good). I think with more of these short updates,this has the potential to be a really great role, but as of now not a winner.Ecekai - (75) This role is very well done. The first paragraph of the firstchapter sets the tone for the whole thing. While I'm not usually one to favorimmature roles, I think there's plenty of potential in here for some great roleplay.Elkae Dibdrielleslin - (75) This started off strong with some nice jest thrown in,but then it was almost like some of the later chapters were an afterthought to getmore xp. While the later chapters are well done, they seem out of order whichmakes the read a bit chaotic. Also, it would be nice if there was a little moredepth to this character particularly how the sphere choice comes into play.Frorania - (55) I just felt like this role was a little on the bland side. Whileit does go into the character map, I think there are some things from the past ofthe character that could have been elaborated upon to give more depth.Gaquos - (50) It's hard for me to see how this character got from the point of hisfather's death to his goals for the future especially when it comes to the cabalpick. However, I do commend you for picking something that's a bit off the mapassuming that it is well roleplayed.Gzurweeg - (65) This is a better than average role, but it just didn't give mewarm fuzzies. I think there were some gaps in it that could have been explained,and there were some things that simply didn't need to be explained.Hyrix - (50) While well written and seething of a certain amount of evil doing,it simply doesn't stand out to me. Also, the sphere choice seems a little offfrom how this reads. I almost think this type of character would have done betterwith a different sphere/religion choice (from only looking at the role).Ilobe Fesby - (75) I really enjoyed the lightness of this role despite its length,but I did not enjoy the injection of things that I think were too real worldly.The whole irish catholic thing (I'm certain you know Arkham no longer has nuns)just put me off. I'm all for roles containing areas or based around areas in CF,but this seemed a bit much. I also enjoyed how the character seemed to naive atfirst, and then matured in later chapters.Inverek - (65) I really liked how the tone of this role gave a nice grasp of thegeneral demeanor of the character, but I simply felt that it was lacking somesubstance as well as being unfinished.Jesmirov - (60) I felt like this role was a little flat, and it encompassed thereligion and only the religion. Not that that's a terrible thing, and it is aperfectly acceptable role, but it simply doesn't give a lot in terms of how torole play the character.Jip - (50) I like the general light almost sing-song tone of this role, and I hopethat is something that is reflected in the role play of the character. Still, Ithink this role has little substance to explain the make of the character.Kalisda - (65) I like how this role sort of shows a slow turn to the dark side.I'm just not seeing a ton of substance here to give me warm fuzzies about it likespecial character quirks that I could see translating into some great RP.Kepiri - DeletedKohrzeck - (50) This role is sort of quick and to the point, not on the level ofsome of the epic tales that are general seen by role contest winners. It is totallyviable for the character make.Kyaltaru - (80) The tell was quick and light, and the length of the updates werein general very nice and to the point while still telling a story. I believe thisrole is a prime example of how to use role updates appropriately. Also, thegeneral moodiness of the character really comes out in the writing. Well done. IfI could find some fault in here, it would be how the sphere choice is represented.Laugash - (40) I am never going to be a fan of OOC roles, especially when they arepresented in this way. Sure, you covered a lot of the character map, but in laterchapters especially it was just off the grid.Liethkim - (50) This started off on the stronger side, and then the update justseemed funky. An acceptable role but nothing that sticks out.Lokinitisim Ferginlarter - (50) Taking a few moments to format a role is alwayssomething that is encouraged as this was a pain to try to read. There wasn't a lothere to keep me captivated in the story, so I rate it as just an average role.Lornis - (75) This role clearly screams evil, and while it is well written,formatted and shows that you spent plenty of time on it, it has the usual short-comings of most evil roles. From my experience it seems like a lot of evil roleslack certain special character quirks that really make a character interesting. Thisone really focuses on the sphere choice, and I think a lot of evil roles focus onthat sphere choice even when it is not their sphere.Majheg - (80) Really nice read and the wording gives it a flow that makes it go byquickly. I do however think that the sphere choice could have been played up a bit moreas well as some updates on the progression of the character.Melrauko - DeletedMhithulzin - DeletedMizze - (45) If this role was left to just the first chapter, it would be a sad sadrole, so I'm glad you made an update. That being said I think there's some parts ofthe character map missing here such as sphere choice.Nado - (60) I get that you are trying to make the chaotic nature of this charactershine through via the first person style, but I think that this role would havebeen better if it was done in third person and then switched perhaps into the mind ofthe character at random times to show the neat first person stuff. Some of the tinyupdates were a little meh, but over all I enjoyed the approach.Nerys - (65) I think the start of this role was nice, but then it started to getdull. The updates simply weren't very true to the role command, and I think theycould have been used to give some movement to the character or further develop itspersonality.Pirkyn - (75) I laughed really hard at the last line of this role. Cute and light,all good things I like to see in roles. Longer chapters, but they were easy to read.However, I do have one big complaint. I like roles to be CF related. Even if someone ismaking up a village or tribe that doesn't exist (which is totally fine) it should stillfollow with general CF terms. Using "Davey Jone's Locker" really stuck out to me. Whois this Mr. Jones to CF culture? I really think you'll be able to do a lot with thisrole and this character. Well done and have a great time with the RP.Pleebert - (85) This was nice and light to read with funny thrown in at all the rightplaces. While the whole role was spaced out over several updates, I really think youdid a great job of filling out the character map.Qaqah - (35) This is entirely too condense to get a complete picture of the charactermap, but it is a fine start especially in explaining the sphere.Rhyaldrin - (65) This is a nice easy ready and it explains the motivations of thecharacter well enough. I think the sphere choice could be elaborated on a bit more,but the updates are nicely placed. Also, the death prayer made me wince more than alittle. :PSkriggua - (50) Like most one chapter roles, there's simply not enough meat here tofill out the character map.Srithra - (65) This is a hard one for me to rate because the style of writing isswitched so often in the role. At some points it is blunt and near OOC of not OOC, andthen at other times it is a story. I think it is within the nature of the rolecommand, but it simply pales compared to some of the other entries in this contest.Ssirenia - (60) On one hand this is a longish role, but it felt a little lopsided, asif the meatier parts of the character map were too rushed and the background was toolong.Sulye Ahaleen (75) The updates in this are really well placed, and everything isclean with a nice comfortable writing style. Still there wasn't really anything inhere that made it shine as a winner.Thaedys - (50) This is a nice start, but it's still very immature. I'm always moreprone to roles that have that long lived fill, so keep adding to it.Thaltran - (65) I really enjoyed the word choice and the momentum the writingstructure provides. I think the second chapter is really nice example of this, and Ifound it quite enjoyable to read. So, why the lower score (which is still aboveaverage). First, paragraphs are nice. Second, I didn't feel like there was a lot ofmeat to this character after reading the role, and I really think that for a contestmore needs to be in there to make a character stand out.Uulgrim - (70) I really get excited when people incorporate CF things into theirroles, and you did this beautifully. The amount of detail in this (I especiallyenjoyed the description of cackle fever) is simply amazing, but I believe it is alsoa downfall of this role. I read a lot of fun things that the character did on a trip,but I didn't learn a lot about the meat of the character.Vaez - (55) The updates on this are nice, and I sort of chuckled at the damagemessages you threw in there. I didn't really think the character was filled outenough to really make it stand out as a great role (mostly from the backgroundstory).Veror - Send me some booze if I lose. Check. I took note of this... but deleted...so not booze for you.Viennie - (75) This was a fun, enjoyable read. The first chapter almost seemed unneededas I'm not sure if it was really explained well in the following chapters, but meh.I think the role is still a little immature, and could use some useful updates that areon the same caliber as the rest of the role. Well done.Weggetana Wentervell - (65) The initial chapters of this role were a bit dry and completely rushed like a lover that wants to move right onto the sex and skip theforeplay (who doesn't like a little foreplay in their reading). Yet, the updates aresimply wonderful (yay for the big finish :P). I especially enjoyed the first chapterconcerning cooking.Yaelin - (80) The background story for this character is really lovely. Not that thestory is lovely, but it is well done in that way. However, I think the meat of thecharacter map is rushed. It was as if I was reading this great story and then hadvarious pieces of information shoved down my throat. I also like the character quirksthat are thrown in here, those are always something that I look for in a great role.Zaireh - (85) So, I started this role at 0530, wanting to get done as this was one ofthree I had left. I look at it, and groaned loud enough to startle my sleeping dogswhen I saw the 20+ chapters. Being a trooper, I started reading, and I have to admitthat I was so lost in the perfect completeness of this role that I forgot I was tired atall. Chapter 3, last line of the 1st paragraph, LOL (There's a few other laughs inthere as well). While it might be easy for me to be totally wooed by this wonderfullystory that is oozing with so many things I like about a role, I think that how the godcame into play as well as the class choice is hazy.Zalenne - (65) I think this is a neat initial concept, but as I went through chapterafter chapter I kept thinking, 'Move on from his already'. It just made the characterseem stagnant with the exception of the very last role update.Zwi - (45) This is really too condensed to stand out in a role contest, and itseems very awkwardly meshed together. A viable role for game purposes, but simplynot something for here.
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